Author Kate Cary on “A good death in writing”

Author Kate Cary on “A good death in writing”

Advice on how to get that death scene just right

BY KATE CARY

A character’s death can be a wonderful opportunity to connect with your reader and a useful way to test your supporting characters. But it can be difficult to give the moment enough feels. Here are a few thoughts I’ve cobbled together on how to write an effective death scene.

You Are the Real Monster in This Story

By killing an important character, you are making an example of them. You are telling your reader loud and clear that if this can happen to a main character it can happen to any of them. It’s going to make your reader a lot more protective of the other characters if they feel that any of them might suddenly be snatched away. You’re using violence to make your reader feel unsafe. You are, in this moment, a sociopath.

Timing is Everything

Good comedy is based on timing. A perfect word said at just the right time, like music hitting a beat in a bar can hammer home a joke and trick a laugh out of anyone. The same is true of good tragedy. Your character has to die at precisely the right moment. Linger on the death too long, and your reader will get bored. Kill your character too quickly, and your reader will feel unsatisfied. You must stoke your reader, cosset and woo them, lead them up to the death so gently and lovingly that by the time it happens they are ready for it. They’ll know it’s coming and need it to happen if only to put them out of their misery and end their anticipation. They’ll want it even though they don’t.

Cutting a Hole in the Fabric

Imagine a beautiful tapestry, carefully woven, each thread holding the other threads in place. Now cut a hole in that tapestry. That hole has got to hurt. The picture must be spoiled but not so much that the tapestry unravels completely. The other threads must stay in place. Your story must still stand even when it loses a character. If killing off your character leaves nothing behind, then you’ve taken too much from your reader. You’ve left them nothing but loss. That may well be your intention, but seriously? Have a little pity. It’s pity that will make your reader love your writing, make them grateful you didn’t take everything from them, make them keep reading in the hope that you have more to give them. Leave something for your reader to hold on to.

Let Your Character’s Ashes Fertilize the Soil

Always, always, always give meaning to a death—unless meaninglessness is your story’s theme. Is your character paying a price by dying, atoning for sins, or buying something for someone else? Or is their death a natural conclusion to a life that has had an impact on those around them? A death can offer as much richness to a story as a life, but only if it offers meaning to the plot, the themes, or the other characters.

Make Death Matter

Even if you want a death to be a surprise, be certain that it still has emotional resonance—by which I mean, don’t make it so much of a surprise that it seems unattached to the rest of the story or unconnected to the other characters. There should be no offhanded “Oh, by the way, Ravenpaw died.” (Of course, done right, a huge death can seem even huger if the news is delivered in a teeny, throwaway line. But that is serious and advanced writing. Everything around that teeny, throwaway line must be set up like an elaborate banquet so that the line—no matter how small a plate on which it’s served—has such a devastating impact that afterward no one can concentrate on their food.) The reader must believe in the death and have a sense that it’s coming, even if they only recognize it afterward. They must feel it was deserved.

Author Kate Cary on “A good death in writing”

What do I mean by “deserved”? Not that the death is necessarily punishment for crimes committed—although that can be useful for giving your reader a sense of redemption—but that the death is earned by the character. We must have experienced enough of their life and known enough of their soul to feel that their death is a full and real experience that resonates in the world around them. Their passing must have weight. It must sit heavily on the other characters and in the story. It can’t be moved or argued with. It must be an irrefutable fact that the story could not live without. It is a necessary sacrifice. Ask yourself the question, will anyone miss this character?

Then ask yourself another.

Will the reader truly, honestly, undeniably feel the loss?

Your reader must care about the character that dies—they don’t have to like them, but they do need to love them. Losing them must be like losing a friend. Watching their friend die must feel like a loss they think they’ll never recover from. They must feel the emptiness of the character’s departure. There must be a hole afterward that they think can never again be filled. One moment something they loved was with them; the next it’s gone, and they need to feel for a moment the awful aloneness of being the one left behind.